Monday, September 26, 2011

RENEGADE VAMPIRE - new scene

Here's a new scene. I've been trying to figure out an interesting way for Talon and his younger brother Jude to meet after not speaking to each other for about 3 years. I think this will work. What do you think?


A light drizzle slapped against the helmets visor while Talon sped down NW Everett. He’d been following man driving a Harley-Davidson ever since NW Twenty-Second, the street where his brother lived. And he was sure the man he’d been following was his sibling. He kept trying to get his attention, but failed. The man apparently had his mind on something else since he wasn’t paying any attention to him.
Damn it. Talon cursed.  I don’t like using my telepathic powers since they give me headaches. Guess I’ll have to resort to using them.
The man on the Harley in front of him swerved to the right at NW Eighth, but within seconds he backed up and sped down Everett. Two other Harley’s followed him.
            “Whoa,” he muttered. Is he running away from them?
            Using his telepathic powers he sent his thoughts to the man’s mind. Jude this is your brother, is that you on the Harley driving down Everett?
            Yeah. He heard the man’s voice in his mind.
            Are those two biker’s bothering you?
            Yeah. They’re rogue slayers and don’t care if us vamps are in that SB Program. He answered. Where the hell are ya?
            Behind them. How do you know they’re slayers?
            By the black ski mask they’re wearin’.
            Oh.
            You got a plan to get me out of this mess, bro/
            Not at the moment.
            Jude continued driving down the street.
            Talon noticed they were reaching NW Sixth and the traffic light blinked red.
            Jude continued his fast pace until he was on the other side of the intersection just missing the oncoming MAX train.
            The two slayers stopped their Harley’s and waited for the train to pass.
            Now using his vampiric abilities a sense of weightlessness over powered him. Talon felt his Harley lift off the pavement and soar over the slayers. Within seconds the roof of the train was directly below him. The moment the train was behind him the motorcycle lowered itself to the street. Both tires screeched and skidded until Talon managed to stop it. By the time he swerved the Harley to face the direction he came from he noticed his brother and his Harley facing the intersection and the slayers.
Awesome move, bro.  He heard his brother’s voice in his mind.
I thought so, he replied as he drove his bike toward him.
Got any plans now, bro?
Not really. Just playing it by ear.
Talon shut off the engine, dismounted, removed the helmet. Sitting it on the Harley’s seat he glanced at his brother.
The two bikers revved up their engines and drove through the intersection toward them. Both of them began to drive in a circle around the two brothers.

NOTE: I’m still trying to figure out exact ending.
                                               If you read this please leave a comment. I'd
                                               like your suggestions on improving scene.
           
                                                                 

           


           

 


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